Hi, my name is Jonathan, I am a fifth grader at Saticoy School and this is a story about me. My favorite hobbies are flying RC planes and flying helicopters. My favorite things to do when I’m not doing anything is skating, biking and walking my dog molly she is a German shepherd. Snowboarding is my favorite thing in the world but I rarely get to go but luckily I’m going this winter. These are my favorite colors, blue and gray. I like gray because it’s a dark color and dark colors are my favorite type of colors. My second favorite color is blue because it’s kind of dark and it’s the color of the ocean and I love to swim so that’s why I like those two colors the most. Now I’m going to tell you about my family. I have three dogs, two turtles and six family members including me. My three dogs are named Molly, Lilly and Ginger. Molly is a German shepherd; she is mix with some other type of dog. She is about a foot and a half tall and that is extremely small for a German shepherd. I think she is the cutest of all and the bravest. She has gotten into a fight with a dog that almost got us sued. She has teeth about an inch long and she can pull me on my skate board and that’s because I walk, train and let her pull me. My second favorite dog is my other dog Lilly and she is mixed wiener dog and Chihuahua mix. She is a peaceful dog and I have never seen her get in a fight and my sister is obsessed with her so I barley get to play with her. She also reminds me of the abused dogs because of her eyes. She is about half a foot tall. She’s small but awesome. She has teeth about half an inch long.
Last but not least my dog Ginger. She barks at Molly and Lilly all the time and it gets very annoying but she was the first born that we actually have now. Ginger has the same thing that Molly has where she doesn’t give up until somebody dies or someone breaks the fight up. She is pretty annoying but she is awesome. She is awesome because she is a Chihuahua and she has been in lots of fights and jumped out of my car. I still miss my other dogs Kayla and Cindy. I don’t like to talk about my dogs that have died. It makes me really sad.
I am going to talk about my family now. I have six family members including me. I have
three brothers, one sister, one dad and one mom. They are awesome family members. I like my parents because they bye lots of games for my brothers and I. They all do snowboarding or skiing including me. Just my mom and my sister don’t snowboard.
I have at least 70 friends but I only these three friends. Their names are Evan, Tyler and Peyton. I don’t know how I ended up being friends with Peyton but I know how I made friends with Tyler and Evan. I met them around friends.
These are my favorite places are Hawaii because I got to swim with the turtles and I got to swim in 75 feet deep ocean. The second best place I’ve been to is big bear snowboarding with the jacket on my back and it isn’t even a snow jacket. I was also wearing a beanie. The worst thing that happened to me is I shot my hand with a metal b-b gun and I got six stitches on the top of my hand. It cost 150 dollars for the 6 stitches. It was also the most the dumbest thing I ever did and my penalty is to do the dishes and the pick up my dogs poops for a month.
Now I’m going to tell you about my air soft wars {plastic not metal!!!!!}. I said not metal with exclamation marks because I was playing with a metal one and I shot my self nad I had to get stitches on the top of my hand. Never play with guns they will hurt you badly!!! I usually have a war behind my brother’s friend’s house. When I get into wars it gets intense because I am the pro at it. Just kidding I have only shoot one or two people in one game but I get shot about ten times a day. This kid named Alfonzo always wears armor really thick about 5 to 6 inches thick and wearing armor like that is cheating a lot. I will not tell you were I live because I don't want to be shot again
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All about Me
Hi, my name is Jonathan, I am a fifth grader at Saticoy School and this is a story about me. My favorite hobbies are flying RC planes and flying helicopters. My favorite things to do when I’m not doing anything is skating, biking and walking my dog molly she is a German shepherd. Snowboarding is my favorite thing in the world but I rarely get to go but luckily I’m going this winter. These are my favorite colors, blue and gray. I like gray because it’s a dark color and dark colors are my favorite type of colors.
My second favorite color is blue because it’s kind of dark and it’s the color of the ocean and I love to swim so that’s why I like those two colors the most. Now I’m going to tell you about my family. I have three dogs, two turtles and six family members including me. My three dogs are named Molly, Lilly and Ginger. Molly is a German shepherd; she is mix with some other type of dog. She is about a foot and a half tall and that is extremely small for a German shepherd. I think she is the cutest of all and the bravest. She has gotten into a fight with a dog that almost got us sued. She has teeth about an inch long and she can pull me on my skate board and that’s because I walk, train and let her pull me.
My second favorite dog is my other dog Lilly and she is mixed wiener dog and Chihuahua mix. She is a peaceful dog and I have never seen her get in a fight and my sister is obsessed with her so I barley get to play with her. She also reminds me of the abused dogs because of her eyes. She is about half a foot tall. She’s small but awesome. She has teeth about half an inch long.
Last but not least my dog Ginger. She barks at Molly and Lilly all the time and it gets very annoying but she was the first born that we actually have now. Ginger has the same thing that Molly has where she doesn’t give up until somebody dies or someone breaks the fight up. She is pretty annoying but she is awesome. She is awesome because she is a Chihuahua and she has been in lots of fights and jumped out of my car. I still miss my other dogs Kayla and Cindy. I don’t like to talk about my dogs that have died. It makes me really sad.
I am going to talk about my family now. I have six family members including me. I have
three brothers, one sister, one dad and one mom. They are awesome family members. I like my parents because they bye lots of games for my brothers and I. They all do snowboarding or skiing including me. Just my mom and my sister don’t snowboard.
I have at least 70 friends but I only these three friends. Their names are Evan, Tyler and Peyton. I don’t know how I ended up being friends with Peyton but I know how I made friends with Tyler and Evan. I met them around friends.
These are my favorite places are Hawaii because I got to swim with the turtles and I got to swim in 75 feet deep ocean. The second best place I’ve been to is big bear snowboarding with the jacket on my back and it isn’t even a snow jacket. I was also wearing a beanie. The worst thing that happened to me is I shot my hand with a metal b-b gun and I got six stitches on the top of my hand. It cost 150 dollars for the 6 stitches. It was also the most the dumbest thing I ever did and my penalty is to do the dishes and the pick up my dogs poops for a month.
Now I’m going to tell you about my air soft wars {plastic not metal!!!!!}. I said not metal with exclamation marks because I was playing with a metal one and I shot my self nad I had to get stitches on the top of my hand. Never play with guns they will hurt you badly!!! I usually have a war behind my brother’s friend’s house. When I get into wars it gets intense because I am the pro at it. Just kidding I have only shoot one or two people in one game but I get shot about ten times a day. This kid named Alfonzo always wears armor really thick about 5 to 6 inches thick and wearing armor like that is cheating a lot. I will not tell you were I live because I don't want to be shot again
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Looking forward to reading your essay, Jonathan! The shading on your portrait is so realistic! You should be very proud of yourself. --Mrs. Geib
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I enjoyed your personal examples and how the words flowed so well in your essay. Thank you for sharing! -- Mrs. Geib